Writing Workshop Peer Review
Intermediate English listening exercise ยท Study Groups
Transcript
Amy: I read your essay on immigration policy. Your thesis is strong, but I think you need more evidence in paragraph three. David: Thanks. What kind of evidence would work there? Amy: Maybe some statistics or a quote from an expert. Right now it reads more like an opinion than a supported argument. David: Good point. I have some data from the census bureau I could add. What about my conclusion? Amy: The conclusion is good but feels rushed. You introduce a new idea in the last sentence that does not connect to the rest of the essay. David: I see. I should probably remove that and instead summarise my main arguments more clearly. Amy: Exactly. Also, watch your transitions between paragraphs. Some of them feel abrupt.
Comprehension questions
- What does Amy say is missing from paragraph three?
- What problem does the conclusion have?
- What does Amy think about David's thesis?
- How does Amy describe the conclusion of David's essay?